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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main fea make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main fea make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts provide key information about
water
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 consumption in six different countries. The units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that, some countries
such
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 as
,
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 South
America
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, South East
Asia
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, Central
Asia
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 and Africa were using
water
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 dramatically except for North
America
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 and
Europe
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.
In addition
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,
Europe
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 industrial consumed
water
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 at 53 per
cent
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.
Whereas
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, South East
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Asia
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Asia's
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 lowest industrial used
water
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 of 12 per
cent
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According to
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 what is shown, consume agricultural increased in South
America
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 at 71 per
cent
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,
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 and decreased in
Europe
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 to 32 per
cent
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.
On the other hand
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, North
America
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 utilized industrial at 48 per
cent
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, and South
America
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 declined to 10 per
cent
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.
Moreover
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, in
Domestic
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domestically
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 both North
America
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 and
Europe
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 are equal in percentages at nearly 15 per
cent
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. In terms of,
consume
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industrial rose in South East
Asia
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 to 12 per
cent
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. The opposite
of
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, Africa dropped to 7 per
cent
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. As for,
in
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domestic South East
Asia
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 and Central
Asia
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 have
same
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 rate at 7 per
cent
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia, europe, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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