The diagram below shows the process of producing construction broicks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of producing construction broicks. 

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture shows information about how to make construction
bricks
.
It is clear that
this
process consists of 7 steps from digging the ground to delivering
bricks
. We can see that the main ingredient is clay and
also
it needs sand and water. The first step starts with taking clay with
digger
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a digger
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. The clay goes on a metal grid to make it finer and
then
goes on a roller.
After
this
, water and sand will be added to make a base of
bricks
. There are two ways to transform the base into a rectangular shape. One is using
wire
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a wire
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cutter and the other one is using
mould
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a mould
the mould
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. In the next step, to make them completely dry, these well-shaped
bricks
need to go in the oven for 24 to 48 hours.
Then
, they should be heated twice in
kiln
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a kiln
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.
Firstly
, in a moderate temperature which is between 200 and 980 Celcius.
Secondly
,
in
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at
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a high temperature between 870 and 1300 Celcius before they get cooled in
cooling
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the cooling
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chamber. It will be stored in the chamber for another few days. In the end, they are packed and
delievered
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delivered
.
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