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The table below gives information about a restaurant's average sales in three different branches in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

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The given tale illustrates information about the average of three different restaurants' sales in Vancouver in 2016.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the restaurant located on Georgia
Street
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 was more famous than others
while
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 there were fewest
transactions
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 in ones on Drake
Street
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.
To begin
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 with, compared between Georgia
Street
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 and Drake
Street
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, 854
transactions
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 were made on the former
while
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 390
transactions
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 were recorded on the latter.
In contrast
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, there were small differences between them, costing 10.69 dollars and 9.02 dollars, respectively. On Georgia
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street
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Street
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, 449 consumers preferred to take-away
while
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 405 customers being lower than take-away people wanted to eat-in.
However
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, on Drake
Street
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, the 200 number of people who want to eat-in slightly exceeded take-away consumers.
On the other hand
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, the average
transactions
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 in the restaurants on Dunsmuir
Street
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 had a median value that
were
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was
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 750, 358, and 392, respectively. There were 750
transactions
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. Especially, the cost of transaction value was the cheapest being recorded at 5.61 dollars, compared with others. and most popular items in all restaurants were cooked from
chicken
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, which were
chicken
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burger
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burgers
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,
chicken
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 wings and
chicken
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 pasta.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words street, transactions, chicken with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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