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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information about the
money
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 spent on
books
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 in Germany , France, Italy and Austria from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
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, the amount of
money
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 spent on
books
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 significantly increased across the three countries and Germany had the highest cost of
books
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 over 10 years ,starting with 80
million
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dollars
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 in 1995 and ending with 95
million
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dollars
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 by 2005
while
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 people in Austria spent the lowest amount of
money
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 on
books
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initially
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 but it replaced by Italian people in 2003 and reached to 63
million
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dollars
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 in 2005 . In Austria, the cost of
books
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 gradually rose from 30
million
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dollars
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 in 1995 to 72
million
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dollars
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 at the time mentioned
although
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, it has a steady trend over 6 years between 1995 to 2001.
Also
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,the people in Germany spent 80
million
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dollars
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 on
books
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 and it
had
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increased to 90
million
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dollars
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 in 1999 and
then
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 reached 99
million
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dollars
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 in 2005. In Italy,The expenditure on
books
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 increased from 50
million
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dollars
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 in 1995 to 61
million
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dollars
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 by 2005 .
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,It went down from 55
million
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dollars
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 in 1997 to 49
million
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dollars
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 in 1999.
in contrast
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, the amount of
money
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 spent on
books
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 dramatically jumped and reached close to 76
million
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dollars
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, books, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending patterns
  • steady increase
  • notable growth
  • highest spending
  • moderate increase
  • significant growth
  • comparative analysis
  • cultural investment
  • economic trends
  • over the period
  • consistently higher
  • between X and Y
  • relative starting point
  • year-on-year increase
  • expenditure on books
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