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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph provides information about the
money
 spent on
books
 in Germany , France, Italy and Austria from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
, the amount of
money
 spent on
books
 significantly increased across the three countries and Germany had the highest cost of
books
 over 10 years ,starting with 80
million
dollars
 in 1995 and ending with 95
million
dollars
 by 2005
while
 people in Austria spent the lowest amount of
money
 on
books
initially
 but it replaced by Italian people in 2003 and reached to 63
million
dollars
 in 2005 . In Austria, the cost of
books
 gradually rose from 30
million
dollars
 in 1995 to 72
million
dollars
 at the time mentioned
although
, it has a steady trend over 6 years between 1995 to 2001.
Also
,the people in Germany spent 80
million
dollars
 on
books
 and it
had
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increased to 90
million
dollars
 in 1999 and
then
 reached 99
million
dollars
 in 2005. In Italy,The expenditure on
books
 increased from 50
million
dollars
 in 1995 to 61
million
dollars
 by 2005 .
Moreover
,It went down from 55
million
dollars
 in 1997 to 49
million
dollars
 in 1999.
in contrast
, the amount of
money
 spent on
books
 dramatically jumped and reached close to 76
million
dollars
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, books, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending patterns
  • steady increase
  • notable growth
  • highest spending
  • moderate increase
  • significant growth
  • comparative analysis
  • cultural investment
  • economic trends
  • over the period
  • consistently higher
  • between X and Y
  • relative starting point
  • year-on-year increase
  • expenditure on books
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