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Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students should be encouraged to questionsvand offer criticism to their teachers. Other think this will lead to a loss of respect discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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More and more individuals believe that high school
students
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 and
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critique
 their instructors with the aim of flourishing schooling
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 others say that it will bring about losing
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respect
to
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teachers
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 and
controling
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controlling
 in the classroom. I would argue
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that despite these negative
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, it can cite improving
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quality
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the quality
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 of education. Admittedly, there are several reasons why people think that
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criticising
teachers
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 and
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questions
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 will lead to negative influence. High school
students
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 will create a loss of discipline in
classroom
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the classroom
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via
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 criticising
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. If
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 judge erroneously their
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,
this
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bring
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 about undermining the role of
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the teacher
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 as a facilitator.
Teachers
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 to
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' feedback and act
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depending
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on their
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 criticism and
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, respect towards
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 may decrease and
students
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 think their instructor is not as experienced as they think.
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,
flourishing
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quality
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 of education by criticising
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own
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 several pros.
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 can identify in teaching which they don't realize by allowing
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 to judge. In that situation, not only
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, but
also
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students
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 may
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well-rounded and experienced.
In other words
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,
students
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 who ask
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 can retain data and
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understand
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,
teachers
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to
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lessons and which thing or information
that
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they desire to be aware
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, some human beings argue
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that
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would
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should
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 be let asking
questions
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 and
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 their
teachers
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 to enhance teaching
quality
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however
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 other people think
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make happen
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 debasement of teacher and a loss of direction in the class
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