Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What extent do yo agree or disagree. What measure do you think might be effective.

In recent years, growing traffic and
pollution
is
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a significant problem. Petrol and other resources caused
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an increase
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increase
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increased
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the
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apply
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pollution
more
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apply
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. Some groups of
people
agree
with
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that increasing the price of these non-reusable resources can prevent the effects on nature.
However
,
people
have different views on
this
agreement. On the one
hand
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using electrical resources can help with decreasing
the
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apply
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pollution
.
For instance
, governments should replace public transport with electrical vehicles.
Besides
, citizens should
use
busses
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buses
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or metros to help with
this
problem. If these innovations
will be proceeding
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,
it
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they
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may reduce the usage of
petrols
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petrol
kinds of petrol
cans of petrol
gallons of petrol
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.
On the other hand
,
people
should
use
electrical
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electric
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vehicles rather than petrol-driven vehicles. And these improvements should be supported by the government.
Moreover
, citizens should
use
public transport between short distances. In spite of it is not necessary to
use
cars to travel
between
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short
distance
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distances
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, and there
is
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are
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lots of
choice's
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to travel in
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an eco
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eco friendly
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way.
Additionally
, governments should give
privilege
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privileges
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to citizens who
use
non-
pollution
way
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ways
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of
traveling
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travelling
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. In conclusion, there
is
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lots of ways to avoid
pollution
. Some
people
think it is the best way to increase the price of fuels to prevent traffic
pollution
.
However
, my view is that
people
should give importance to
this
problem because it will affect our
life
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lives
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in the future.
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  • pollution
  • congestion
  • public transportation
  • emission regulations
  • electric vehicles
  • sustainable
  • fuel-efficient
  • incentivize
  • infrastructure
  • alternative transportation
  • traffic management systems
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