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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table represents the percentage of students who prefer certain types of secondary
schools
 across four categories between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
, only community
schools
 experienced an increase over the
year
,
while
 the other three dropped either a significant or slight decline. Looking in more detail, in 2000 voluntary-controlled
schools
 comprised the majority of the attendees, making up 52% of the total. Followed by grammar
schools
 with 24%, and specialist
schools
as well as
 community
schools
 at half lower.
Although
 community-based showed the smallest number in the initial
year
, in
five
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 next
year
 it increased threefold at 32%.
On the other hand
, specialist
schools
 dropped by 1%, showing no significant fall in 2005.
Similarly
, the proportion of pupils in grammar-based and voluntary-controlled
schools
 decreased by 19% and 38%, respectively, in 2005. In the
last
year
,
schools
 of the community type continued to grow and became the most popular
schools
 in 2009, reaching 58% of the total attendance.
Besides
 that, the number of voluntary-controlled
schools
 plunged nearly double with a fifth in 2009, trailed by grammar classes and specialist classes that remained downward
with
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 12% and 10%, respectively.
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