The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

The line graph represents the average monthly price fluctuations compared with
previous
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month of
copper
,
nickel
and
zinc
throughout 2014.
Overall
, all 3 metals fluctuated badly during 2014.
However
, is interesting note is that the
nickel
experienced
downward
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trend, but
zinc
and
copper
were
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stabilised to around
in
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the same figure
like
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in January
at the end
of the year. From January to June 2014,
nickel
fluctuated and faced a dramatic fall from 6%
to-3
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to 3
%. Coming to
zinc
and
copper
were
the
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equal incline of figures from 1% and 2%, correspondingly, up to -1 for both metals by June 2014.
However
,
situation
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a bit improved
from
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June 2014,
the
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metals
price
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started to incline.
For instance
,
nickel
achieved 1% by the end of 2014,
however
did not take
it
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leading position as in January 2014.
As to
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,
zinc
and
copper
reached
to
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around 2% by the end of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, nickel, zinc with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Price fluctuation
  • Average monthly change
  • Trend
  • Increase/decrease
  • Peak/trough
  • Stability
  • Volatility
  • Comparative analysis
  • Market factors
  • Economic events
  • Historical influence
  • Performance metrics
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