The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various

formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gives information about how many films
are
Wrong verb form
were
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rented or sold by a specific store from 2002 to 2011.
Rentals
and
sales
are listed into four categories:
rentals
, VHS
sales
, DVD
sales
and Blu-ray
sales
.
Overall
,
rentals
experienced a negative trend over the given period,
while
DVD
sales
initially
saw a
postive
Correct your spelling
positive
trend, but
have
Wrong verb form
had
show examples
a little decrease after their peak in 2007. VHS
sales
has
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have
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a
drammatically
Correct your spelling
dramatically
decrease, as they
come
Wrong verb form
came
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to zero in 2006, and never had another sale.
On the other hand
, blu-ray
sales
,
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
first appeared on the market in 2007,
rised
Correct your spelling
rose
regularly until 2011.
Rentals
started in 2002 with approximately 185,000
copies
, but ended in 2011 with just under 60,000, after a regular decline.
In contrast
to that, DVD
sales
became four
time
Change to a plural noun
times
show examples
higher between 2002 and 2007, with a highest of just over 200,000
copies
. After
that
Add a comma
that,
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they
shown
Wrong verb form
showed
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a
little
Correct word choice
small
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drop to nearly 180,000
sales
in 2011. VHS
sales
drammatically
Correct your spelling
dramatically
drop between 2002 and 2006. They started
by
Change preposition
with
show examples
approximately 85,000 annual
copies
and reached zeros in 2006. Blu-ray
sales
began in 2007 and have a little increase, reaching around 12,000
copies
in 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rentals, sales, copies with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.

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