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The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart gives information about how many films
are
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were
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 rented or sold by a specific store from 2002 to 2011.
Rentals
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 and
sales
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 are listed into four categories:
rentals
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, VHS
sales
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, DVD
sales
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 and Blu-ray
sales
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.
Overall
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,
rentals
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 experienced a negative trend over the given period,
while
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 DVD
sales
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initially
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 saw a
postive
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positive
 trend, but
have
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had
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 a little decrease after their peak in 2007. VHS
sales
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has
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have
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 a
drammatically
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dramatically
 decrease, as they
come
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came
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 to zero in 2006, and never had another sale.
On the other hand
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, blu-ray
sales
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,
that
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which
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 first appeared on the market in 2007,
rised
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rose
 regularly until 2011.
Rentals
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 started in 2002 with approximately 185,000
copies
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, but ended in 2011 with just under 60,000, after a regular decline.
In contrast
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 to that, DVD
sales
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 became four
time
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times
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 higher between 2002 and 2007, with a highest of just over 200,000
copies
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. After
that
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that,
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 they
shown
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showed
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 a
little
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small
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 drop to nearly 180,000
sales
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 in 2011. VHS
sales
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drammatically
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dramatically
 drop between 2002 and 2006. They started
by
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with
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 approximately 85,000 annual
copies
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 and reached zeros in 2006. Blu-ray
sales
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 began in 2007 and have a little increase, reaching around 12,000
copies
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 in 2011.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rentals, sales, copies with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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