The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate percentages of online shopping
sales
in New Zealand and are divided into four retail categories over two different years: 2003 and 2013.
The sector that has seen the highest rise is
film and music, which has increased its Correct your spelling
in
sales
percentage
from 21% to 33%. Another positive trend,despite a lower
increase in percentage
, has been experienced by books, which reached 22%
in 2013 starting from 19% in 2003.
On the other hand
, travel and clothes saw approximately the same negative trend, indeed their sales
have lost respectively 7% and 8%. So, the travel sector, which had the highest sales
percentage
in 2003, was in 2013 in second place, right behind film and music.
In summary, from the charts, it can be seen that the sectors which are linked with culture and
education, like books film and music, saw a rise in their sales
percentage
, while
the other
sectors experienced a drop.Submitted by alessandrorepola.repola on
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