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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The
chart
 illustrates
to
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5
type
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types
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 of
energy
 sources’
comparing
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compared
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 in
france
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France
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 between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, the
chart
 has 5
catagories
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categories
 of
energy
. These are Coal,
Gas
, Petro, Nuclear, Other. The Coal source has
biggest
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rate
both
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in both
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 years.
On the other hand
,
Gas
 is
second
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 place in
the
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both
chart
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charts
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. İn addition, Petro
is rise
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rose
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 down in 1995 to 2005,
also
, Nuclear and Other
energy
 sources
increase
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increased
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 from 1995 to 2005.
However
,
Coal
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the Coal
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 source is top of the list with 30
percent
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per cent
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,
simillarly
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similarly
,
Gas
 is over the quarter of
total
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the total
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rate
 in the below in 1995, it is 29,63%.
Also
 Nuclear and Other are close to 10
percent
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 of the
chart
 in 1995.
On the other hand
,
Gas
 and Coal energies rise to over 30% from 1995 to 2005.
On
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the
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other
word
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, their total
rate
 is over the half of
chart
’s rates.
Also
 Petro
rate
almost
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equel
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equal
 to
total
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a total
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 of Others and Nuclear
energy
 sources in 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, energy, gas, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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