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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

#show #comparison #kinds #energy #production #france #two #years
The
chart
 illustrates
to
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5
type
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types
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 of
energy
 sources’
comparing
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compared
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 in
france
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France
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 between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, the
chart
 has 5
catagories
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categories
 of
energy
. These are Coal,
Gas
, Petro, Nuclear, Other. The Coal source has
biggest
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rate
both
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in both
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 years.
On the other hand
,
Gas
 is
second
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 place in
the
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both
chart
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charts
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. İn addition, Petro
is rise
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rose
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 down in 1995 to 2005,
also
, Nuclear and Other
energy
 sources
increase
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increased
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 from 1995 to 2005.
However
,
Coal
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the Coal
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 source is top of the list with 30
percent
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per cent
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,
simillarly
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similarly
,
Gas
 is over the quarter of
total
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the total
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rate
 in the below in 1995, it is 29,63%.
Also
 Nuclear and Other are close to 10
percent
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per cent
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 of the
chart
 in 1995.
On the other hand
,
Gas
 and Coal energies rise to over 30% from 1995 to 2005.
On
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the
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apply
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other
word
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, their total
rate
 is over the half of
chart
’s rates.
Also
 Petro
rate
almost
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was almost
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equel
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equal
 to
total
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a total
the total
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 of Others and Nuclear
energy
 sources in 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, energy, gas, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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