The graphs below show how people in a European city reached their office and got back home in 1959 and 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie
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five types of vehicles which were used by people to do their daily
works
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1959
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and 2009.
Overall
,
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the average distance increased in 2009 , the duration decreased
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it, because of the modern technologies and it is obvious that other types of transportation were used by few people to reach work.
Furthermore
, the dominant vehicle was
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in 1959,
while
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in 2010. To look at details,the main transport was
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in 1959 with 55%,
although
it dropped to 25% in 2009.
Moreover
, using the train and the bus to travel followed similar patterns and almost remained stable
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two years
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15%.
In addition
, despite the fact that only 5% of the citizens went to workplaces with other vehicles in 1959 , the number of people who used other transportation went up by 12% in 2009.
However
, individuals were less likely to use
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as vehicles in 1959, with the contribution of new invention, it went up by 25%.
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