The graphs below show how people in a European city reached their office and got back home in 1959 and 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie
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charts
chart
compares
five types of vehicles which were used by people to do their daily Correct subject-verb agreement
compare
works
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work
1959
and 2009.
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in 1959
Overall
, Linking Words
although
the average distance increased in 2009 , the duration decreased Linking Words
according to
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the
it, because of the modern technologies and it is obvious that other types of transportation were used by few people to reach work. Remove the article
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Furthermore
, the dominant vehicle was Linking Words
foot
in 1959, Add an article
a foot
the foot
while
it was Linking Words
car
in 2010.
To look at details,the main transport was Add an article
a car
the car
foot
in 1959 with 55%, Add an article
a foot
the foot
although
it dropped to 25% in 2009.
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Moreover
, using the train and the bus to travel followed similar patterns and almost remained stable Linking Words
in
two years Change preposition
for
with
15%. Change preposition
at
In addition
, despite the fact that only 5% of the citizens went to workplaces with other vehicles in 1959 , the number of people who used other transportation went up by 12% in 2009. Linking Words
However
, individuals were less likely to use Linking Words
car
as vehicles in 1959, with the contribution of new invention, it went up by 25%.Fix the agreement mistake
cars
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