Water is a natural resource that should always be free. Governments should ban the sale of bottled water. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Water
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is know
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as
basic
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need for every living organism. As it occurs from nature , it must be
cost free
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.
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, I totally agree with
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topic that
government
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should restrict the sale of
water
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. We all know that
water
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is
form
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of nature and currently humankind runs as a business. They get huge
amount
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of profit from
such
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natural resources .
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, we know
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naturally
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with no cost so they rely on it and make a sale to fill their own empty stomachs .
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, the report was carried out about
water
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use . They noticed a loss of nature and full pockets of the companies in
saling
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selling
saving
purposes . Here, it was noted that it affected
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environmentally
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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