The bar chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart reveals information regarding the split section of households given by gender in Great Britain.
Overall
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,
Females
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in household tasks experienced a went up to went downtrend.
while
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,
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apply
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work showed a downward trend throughout the period. Both, divisions of housework had some fluctuations As can be seen from the bar graph, the biggest increase over the relevant period occurred in the cooking and baking category particularly
females
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from six different segments reaching a peak of approximately seventy-two in the first section
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males
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witnessed the third biggest decrease at 30
minutes
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per person per day. At the same time for the cleaning house tidying
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saw the second biggest increase at nearly fifty-nine
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compared to eleven for men.
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biggest increase occurred in gardening, and Pet care at fifty
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per person compared to twenty
minutes
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for
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. It is possible to see from the bar chart that
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females
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dominated the chores in the house, there is
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statistical evidence that men dominated the gardening, and Pet care at fifty to twenty between
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and
females
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respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words females, males, minutes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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