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The given two diagram illustrate the layout of two areas in two different years 1936 and 2007.

The given two diagram illustrate the layout of two areas in two different years 1936 and 2007.
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The given
two
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 diagrams illustrate the
layout
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 of
two
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 areas in
two
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 different years 1936 and 2007. The given
two
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 diagrams illustrate the
layout
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 of
two
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 areas in
two
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 different years 1936 and 2007.
Overall
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, it is clear from the
layout
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 that the
two
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 areas have gone through a lot of changes from 1937 to 2007. In 1936, on the upper-right
side
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 of the
layout
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, there were three trees, and on the upper-left
side
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 of the
layout
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, there was a river.
In
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 the lower-right
side
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 of the
layout
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, there was a cycle path, and
in
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on
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 the lower-left
side
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 of the map, there was a government
office
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. At the very middle of the
layout
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, there were numerous shops
such
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 as a flower
shop
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, a sweet
shop
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, and a butcher
shop
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. There
were
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also
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a
the
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post
office
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, bank, and library. In the year 2007, the
layout
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 has developed a lot. On the upper-right
corner
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 of the
layout
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, there was only one tree left, and the others were chopped down. In the upper-left
corner
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 of the map, the river was replaced by a residential area.
At
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 the middle of the
layout
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, a shopping centre has been established.
However
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,
bank
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the bank
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, post
office
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 and
libray
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library
 remained in the same place.
Flower
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The flower
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shop
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 was replaced by a travel
agenc
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agent
agency
,y and the sweet
shop
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 and the butcher
shop
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is
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 replaced by a supermarket. Meanwhile, The cycle path in the
lower-left
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lower left
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corner
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,
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 is replaced by a road with traffic lights, and in the
lower-right
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lower right
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corner
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, the government
office
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 is replaced by a museum and a golf course.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, layout, side, office, shop, corner with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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