In today’s very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. Among the skills that a worker should possess, Which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualification? Explain the reasons and provide specific examples to support your answer.

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current
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the current
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competitive era, a
worker
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multiple
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. Social
skills
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qualification
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qualifications
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are the
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by a
worker
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worker
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the knowledge for the job and social
skills
would help the employee to cooperate with their
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colleagues
. Having a good
qualification
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aspect for
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an employee
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to work on their task. Mastering the knowledge means a half of the job is already done. Good
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qualifications
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earned from practice,experience, and education. The combination of those three things
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employee valued higher by their companies.
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example, people with a lot of
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and higher education are
prefered
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preferred
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chosen
rather than fresh graduates.
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good social
skills
will
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a good
qualification
. Social
skills
are needed by the
worker
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workers
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,
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because it's
helps
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them to be a leader and
makes
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a
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great teamwork. Leadership and cooperation are the most important things
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executing the job. A team which consists of
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workers with
a great qualifications
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great qualifications
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with diverse
personality
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personalities
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needs
a
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strong leadership to make a great team. Social
skills
and good
qualification
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qualifications
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are two things that can't be separated to
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as a
worker
. Football teams are
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example
about
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the ability, cooperation, and leadership should be combined to
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match. Every
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has
strategy
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a strategy
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with diverse
player's
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skills
, and positions, the coach is there to make
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great cooperation and the captain is the one who will
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and
mmotivates
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motivate
them to win.
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grammar
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conclusion
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example
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coherence
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task response
The essay addresses the topic by discussing both social skills and qualifications with relevant examples.
example
The use of analogies, such as the football team example, effectively illustrates the combination of skills necessary for success.
coherence
There is a clear distinction between the discussion of social skills and qualifications, demonstrating an understanding of the topic.

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