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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012 You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012 You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates the exportation
in
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from
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Australia
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 to four
others
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other
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 countries Japan,
US
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the US
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, China and India between 1990 and 2012.
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, there was a similar upward trend in both the percentage of
Austrailia
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Australian
exports
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 to Japan and India
wherease
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whereas
 the
figure
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 for
United
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the United
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 States and China experienced a contrasting movement over the period. First of all, the proportion of
exports
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 in
Australia
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 to Japan started at 27% ,
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 fell gradually by 7% in 1995.
This
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figure
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 continued
mild
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 decrease under around 20% from 1995 to 2010,
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 later remained unchanged at 18% in 2012. As can be seen
that
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,
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 data to
United
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the United
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 States witnessed a fluctuation
around
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of around
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at
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apply
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13% over the period
15
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of 15
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 years from 1990 to 2005. The amount of
export
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exports
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 in
Australia
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 to
United
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the United
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 States
also
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 declined slightly by 2% ,but later
this
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figure
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 witnessed minimal growth at 7%. From 1990 to 2000, the number of Australian
exports
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 a slight climb of 2% ,
this
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figure
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 for China witnessed
dramatically increased
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a dramatic increase
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by
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 21% and peaked at 30% in the
last
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 period. In India, the percentage of
exports
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 from
Australia
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 started at 3% in 1990 and
then
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 didn't have any big change from 1990 to 2000, still approximately at 6%.
While
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this
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 data in the next 5 years experienced a noticeable went up at 8% ,but later declined minimally
at
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 6% in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, exports, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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