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The table provides a comparison of the expenditure rate of the government on education and training and participation rate of 18-24 year olds in the same in five nations in the year 2002

The table provides a comparison of the expenditure rate of the government on education and training and participation rate of 18-24 year olds in the same in five nations in the year 2002
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The table compares the
rate
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 of training and
participation
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 among 18-24 years old and the government's
expenditure
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rate
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 on education in five countries in 2002
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, five countries were at different rates
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,Poland had the lowest
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rate
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 Slovenia had the highest Poland had the highest
participation
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 among others and Romania had the lowest
rate
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. As the table shows, first in Poland the
expenditure
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rate
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 was 5% and
participation
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 was 44% in 2002 next
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in the Czech Republic 9% was the
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rate
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 and 27% in
participation
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, next Romania was 9% in
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 and 27% in
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 Hungary was 13% and 34% in
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 and
participation
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rate
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 the
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 one is Slovenia it was 25%
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rate
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 and 40%
participation
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 in 2002.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, participation, expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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