For the past year, you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter- * state what type of membership you have and how much you have paid for it? * explain how you have benefited from the club * give reasons on why you want to leave

Hello , MR
Osama
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Osama,
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want to be persistent in your class , But , I am determined to cancel my membership for many reasons.
Firstly
, I have had many levels of
club
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the club
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, cause , I changed it more than two times ,
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was looking for what the most comfortable for me , And , it was
VIP
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the VIP
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of
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had , I paid 200 dollars every week ,
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, that price was including discount 20 per cent .
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, My body was improved by the club ,
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feel better than before , I have had bad emotions ,
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, Now my emotions and my
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So much better.
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, I would like to tell you my reasons for cancelling the membership , I got a new baby now as you know the children need taken care of
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represent my company in an exhibition . Thank you, I am looking forward to hearing back from you .
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single idea per paragraph
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task achievement
Be sure to clearly outline each point requested in the task for a complete response.
suitable writing tone
Friendly and appropriate tone used throughout the letter.
greeting and closing
Clear introduction and closing, contributing to a well-rounded letter structure.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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