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The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the process of making matches. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the process of making matches. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The picture
illustrate
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illustrates
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 how
produce
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to produce
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 matches.
Overall
, there are nine stages of making matches, from
peeler
Correct article usage
the peeler
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 of
blade
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the blade
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 to the how it
go
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goes
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 to the packaging
area
. First of all the blade is peeled and veneer in the log. Once matches have been chopped, they
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are than
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than
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then
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 washed in
ammonium
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an ammonium
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 phosphate tank.
After
this
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this,
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 the small parts of
matches
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the matches
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 dried in
circle
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a circle
the circle
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.
Next
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The next
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 step is
that
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to
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dried
Wrong verb form
dry
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matches
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the matches
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 blower and hopper under
metal
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the metal
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 duct and go to the storage
area
. After sorting they
are going
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go
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 to the inserter stage
by
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with
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 big and longer
tuble
Correct your spelling
tubles
, so that, matches are perforated steel
belt
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belts
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 that
contains
Correct subject-verb agreement
contain
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 different sizes of circles that help to
moving
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move
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steel
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the steel
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 belt.
Following
this
step
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step,
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 they are dried in the drying
area
. Meanwhile, matches
mixed
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are mixed
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 in the paraffin wax, based chemicals and tip chemical tank
according to
 the
colors
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colours
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.
Finally
, dried matches go to the packaging
area
 to
packing
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pack
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 into boxes.
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