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On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of the company – describe the item lost – explain how you lost it – tell the insurance company what you would like them to do

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that recently I lost my valuable
item
 and that
item
 was fully recoverable by your company. I hope you will provide me
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a
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full coverage of
this
item
. The
item
 which I lost is
Motorbike
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a Motorbike
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. It was black in color and
brand
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a brand
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 new model from Honda company. The number plate was VSF820. I wrote my birthday date on the back of
this
item
 as it was gifted by my parents on that day We all friends went to
shimla
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Shimla
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 to enjoy our holidays over there. And we embarked
this
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 journey on our motorbike and for that we booked a hotel as well. I am pretty sure that I parked my bike in
the
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front of the hotel. But after
few
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a few
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 minutes, I was unable to find it. I want the insurance company
provide
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 the reimbursement of
this
 lost
item
. I would be very grateful to you. Hope to hear back from you soon! Yours Faithfully, Jazz.
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task response
Include some more details about the value of the item and your policy number to strengthen the request.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph flows logically into the next to enhance coherence.
suitable writing tone
You have a friendly and respectful tone throughout the letter.
single idea per paragraph
The paragraphing is generally effective, covering one main point each, such as describing the item and how it was lost.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable possession
  • insurance claim
  • misplace
  • irreplaceable
  • receipt
  • policyholder
  • reimbursement
  • coverage
  • claim number
  • deductible
  • documentation
  • authenticate
  • liability
  • premium
  • accidental loss
  • indemnity
  • beneficiary
  • contact details
  • substantiate
  • correspondence
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