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The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the quantity of
consumer
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goods
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 in 4 nations about spending habit of shopping in 2012. At
the
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first glance, it becomes clear that
Britain
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 had the highest tendency
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 all spending habits.
According to
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 the graph, Austria was the second highest point on books, toys and cameras.
On the other hand
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,
Spain
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 and
Belgium
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's amount of
consumer
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goods
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 remains stable
on
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 all different products. Specifically, In
Britain
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, people had a big requirement for cameras, it recorded 165 thousand pounds to the bar graph.
However
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 ,
Britain
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's people were not a big fan of console
games
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, we can see that, it had the lowest point at 155 thousand pounds in 2012.
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, Austria nation was the second-highest
consumer
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on
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 books and cameras. But if we looked at the toys, it was the same with
Spain
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 nations in 2012.
In contrast
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, Austrian people had a low tendency
on consuming
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 outdoor game accessories, console
games
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 and cosmetics.
Furthermore
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,
Belgium
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 and
Spain
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's spending habits on gaming systems and street
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games
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game
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 accessories were relatively close to each other.
Spain
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 had
high
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a high
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consuming
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consumption
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on
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of
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 outdoor
games
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 accessories and cosmetics with around 155 thousand pounds after
Britain
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.
Belgium
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's quantity of
consumer
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 products increased and decreased on different
goods
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. The amount of all different products remained the same in 2012. All consuming
goods
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 were close to each other in
Belgium
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumer, goods, britain, spain, belgium, games with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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