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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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THE TWO MAPS COMPARE THE CURRENT AND FUTURE RENOVATIONS OF A UNIVERSITY'S GYM CENTRE .
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IT IS CLEAR THAT
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 THERE WILL BE SIGNIFICANT CHANGES IN THE OUTDOOR COURTS BY ADDING SEVERAL NEW FACILITIES. LOOKING INTO MORE DETAILS, THERE IS A SWIMMING POOL IN THE HEART OF
GYM
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THE GYM
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 CENTRE, IT IS SURROUNDED
WITH
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BY
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 CHANGING ROOM AND SEATING AREA.
RECEPTION
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THE RECEPTION
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 AREA
HAS BEEN
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IS
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 LOCATED IN FRONT OF
POOL
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THE POOL
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 AND IT
IS FACING
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FACES
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 WITH ENTRANCE. TURNING TO SIGNIFICANT CHANGES, IT IS PLANNED THAT THERE WILL BE THREE CHANGING ROOMS AND SPORTS HALL WILL BE CONSTRUCTED TO THE WEST OF POOL. ON THE WESTERN SIDE OF
CENTRE
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THE CENTRE
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, TWO DANCING
STUDIO
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STUDIOS
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 WILL BE ADDED NEXT TO
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THE CHANING
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CHANING
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CHANGING
 ROOM. IN ORDER TO RELAX, CAFE IS PLANNED TO BE BUILT CONNECTED TO CHANGING ROOMS.
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In the introduction, clearly state what the maps are showing and use more precise terms such as 'sports centre' instead of 'gym centre.'
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Include more specific details about the current and proposed features in relevant paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words or phrases to logically connect different ideas (e.g., 'In addition,' 'Furthermore,' 'Another significant change').
coherence cohesion
Provide a concluding paragraph to summarize the key changes and implications of the redevelopment.
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Try to use a wider range of vocabulary and grammatical structures to enhance clarity and interest.
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A good attempt to describe the proposed changes in a clear way.
coherence cohesion
The overall structure is logical and follows a clear plan of description.
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The essay describes both the current layout and the planned changes, covering the main points of the task.

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