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You have arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain the important event apologise for the situation suggest a new arrangement

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Dear Manjot Hope you are doing great.
Its
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 been a year
to
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since to
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meet
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met
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 you. I was really excited to
met
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 you but
unfortunately
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i
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I
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 have to change the date
one
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to one
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 month later
from
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than
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 the agreed date My sister gave
a
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birth to a baby boy. So she is going to stay at my place for a month. If
i
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will
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am
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 not there to help her she will
very
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 disappointed.
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,
i
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 am the only person in
house
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the house
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 for her help.
Meanwhile
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i
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 need to reschedule the date
in
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for
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march
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March
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instead
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 of February.
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 very hard for me because
from
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very
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a very
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 long i excited to
met
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meet
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 you. Indeed after receiving
this
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 mail you will hurt your schedule will disturbed. I am very sorry for
this
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 but the situation made me
to
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do
this
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. I already
apply
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applied
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 for
visa
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the visa
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. After getting
visa
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a visa
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i
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 will book flights
of
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23rd
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the 23rd
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 of
march
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March
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. Hope you will not disappoint. We will meet you soon. Your lovingly Simar
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coherence cohesion
Work on separating different ideas into distinct paragraphs to improve clarity and focus on each aspect of your message.
task response
Clarify some of your statements to ensure full understanding by the reader, such as mentioning exactly how you plan to help your sister.
coherence cohesion
The letter opens and closes with appropriate greetings and sign-off, making it feel personal and polite.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is suitable for a personal message to a friend, showing sincerity and care.
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