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The charts below show the percentage of water used for defferent purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for defferent purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie charts
illuatrate
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illustrate
 the amount of
water
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 which is used for different aims in six regions of the globe.
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, three major usages of
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 including industrial, agricultural, and domestic
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, have been shown on the graphs. What stands out from the charts is that agriculture is the main cause of
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use
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 in four areas out of six. If we look
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Africa,
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Central and
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South East Asia
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 over four-fifths of their
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 sources in agriculture.
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,
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North America and
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Europe spend
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approximately
 one-third of their
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 on it.
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Moreover
, these two developed regions
use
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 around half of their
water
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 in their industry. Less developed areas mostly
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 under 10% of their
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 for industrial purposes. Domestic
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 of
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 is around 15% in
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North and
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South America, and
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Europe.
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, it is less than one-tenth of
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 in three other regions.
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