Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

Many
people
want to try new
things
not only to go to new places or food but
also
to change careers and go out of their comfort zone.
However
, a few
people
always do the same thing because they are always afraid to do new
things
. I think
try
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new
things
can be scary but it is the path
of
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success in
life
. On the one hand, to be successful in
the
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life
,
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one need
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need
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to go out of the comfort zone.
People
who
likes
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to try new
things
in their
life
they always face a lot of challenges in their
life
and when they know how to face challenges
then
they can touch the success of
life
.
For example
, going to Canada for higher study and work
in
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a certain age is really hard but if anyone can take that risk and struggle
a
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certain time period
then
they will have a smooth
life
.
On the other hand
, it always says that easy roads always end with tough situations. When
people
do not want to try new
things
and stay in their known place, even though it is toxic, they end up with a hard situation in their
life
.
For instance
, a lot of
people
do not want to change their career or job because they are doing that for a long time.
Actually
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they are often afraid to learn new skills and upgrade their knowledge.
As a result
, they are stuck in the same place even though it is not good for them. In conclusion, the easy road always ends with
hard
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a hard
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life
and hard decisions end with
smooth
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life
.
People
who want to try new
things
they
are always make
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their
life
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successful and
people
who prefer to do the same
things
they
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apply
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are afraid
face
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to face
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challenges. In my opinion, if anyone wants to be successful in their
life
they need to go out of their comfort zone.
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Though the response covers both perspectives, try to provide more detailed arguments and examples for each view to provide a more comprehensive response to the task.
Coherence & Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both clearly present, outlining the key points and summarizing the perspective effectively.
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The essay includes relevant examples, such as moving to Canada, to support the ideas presented.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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