Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
Many
people
want to try new Use synonyms
things
not only to go to new places or food but Use synonyms
also
to change careers and go out of their comfort zone. Linking Words
However
, a few Linking Words
people
always do the same thing because they are always afraid to do new Use synonyms
things
. I think Use synonyms
try
new Wrong verb form
trying
things
can be scary but it is the path Use synonyms
of
success in Change preposition
to
life
.
On the one hand, to be successful in Use synonyms
the
Correct article usage
apply
life
, Use synonyms
Correct pronoun usage
one need
need
to go out of the comfort zone. Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
People
who Use synonyms
likes
to try new Change the verb form
like
things
in their Use synonyms
life
they always face a lot of challenges in their Use synonyms
life
and when they know how to face challenges Use synonyms
then
they can touch the success of Linking Words
life
. Use synonyms
For example
, going to Canada for higher study and work Linking Words
in
a certain age is really hard but if anyone can take that risk and struggleChange preposition
at
a
certain time period Change preposition
for a
then
they will have a smooth Linking Words
life
.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, it always says that easy roads always end with tough situations. When Linking Words
people
do not want to try new Use synonyms
things
and stay in their known place, even though it is toxic, they end up with a hard situation in their Use synonyms
life
. Use synonyms
For instance
, a lot of Linking Words
people
do not want to change their career or job because they are doing that for a long time. Use synonyms
Actually
they are often afraid to learn new skills and upgrade their knowledge. Add a comma
Actually,
As a result
, they are stuck in the same place even though it is not good for them.
In conclusion, the easy road always ends with Linking Words
hard
Add an article
a hard
life
and hard decisions end with Use synonyms
smooth
Correct article usage
a smooth
life
. Use synonyms
People
who want to try new Use synonyms
things
they Use synonyms
are always make
their Change the verb form
always make
Use synonyms
life
successful and Fix the agreement mistake
lives
people
who prefer to do the same Use synonyms
things
Use synonyms
they
are afraid Correct pronoun usage
apply
face
challenges. In my opinion, if anyone wants to be successful in their Add the particle
to face
life
they need to go out of their comfort zone.Use synonyms
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