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You went to the local hospital's Emergency Department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and while you were waiting. You were constantly ignored by the other staff. Write a complaint about it

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Dear Emergency Department, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction regarding
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visited
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your
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 hospital because of my
2 year old
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 child's stomachache and your staff
neglected
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 my child and to bring to your attention the concerns I have encountered formally. I believe it is important to address
this
matter
 promptly to resolve. Two days ago, I utilized
service
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 from your company. Unfortunately, my experience was far from satisfactory. Your staff kept us waiting too long and ignored us.
This
 issue has had a significant impact on me, causing inconvenience and distress. I expected better from your company
,
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 and the current
situation
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the situation
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 does not meet the standards of quality and
service
 that I have come to associate with your brand. I want to complain about what happened. In light of the above, I am seeking compensation for the
service
 in question Emergency Department. I believe that a fair resolution to
this
matter
 would be satisfying my needs. I trust that your company values its customers and is committed to providing excellent
service
. I expect
this
matter
 to be addressed promptly and resolved to my satisfaction. Thank you for your prompt attention to
this
 issue. I believe that, with your cooperation, we can resolve
this
matter
 amicably. Yours sincerely, Ulugʻbek
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task achievement
Your complaint outlines the main issue clearly, but adding specific details regarding the date and time of the visit, and the specific actions (or lack thereof) of the staff could strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical flow by ensuring each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. For example, more clearly differentiate between the description of the problem and your expectations from the hospital.
task achievement
You have expressed your dissatisfaction and expectations clearly, which is essential for task achievement.
coherence cohesion
The structure includes an introduction and a conclusion, which bookends your argument effectively.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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