The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart provides key
informations
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information
pieces of information
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about the
population
size
,
birth
rate
and
the
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apply
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death
rate
. The units are measured in
million
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millions
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.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph the fact that
population
size
had a significant
increase
from 1800 to year 2000.
In addition
, in 1900
birth
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the birth
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rate
and
population
size
was
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were
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had the same
rate
whearas
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whereas
, in 1950
population
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the population
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size
show
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showed
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a considrable
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considrable
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considerable
considerably
increase
and
birth
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the birth
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size
droppred
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dropped
from 30 to less than 25.
According to
what is shown, in 1700,
birth
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the birth
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rate
had the highest
rate
30 million and the
death
rate
was between
population
size
and
birth
rate
less than 30 and bigger than 10 in 1750
population
size
increase
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increased
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and
birth
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the birth
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and
death
rate
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rates
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remained. In terms
of
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apply
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, in 1900 the highest
rate
was
population
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a population
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size
bigger than 40 million and the smallest
rate
was in the
death
rate
and the
birth
rate
start
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started
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to decrease, in 1950
population
size
and
birth
rate
increase
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increased
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, size, birth, rate, death, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic changes
  • population growth
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • gradual increase
  • notable decline
  • Industrial Revolution
  • public health improvements
  • significant rise
  • wartime periods
  • substantial growth
  • natural decrease in mortality
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