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Some people say that death penalty is the only way to decrease the rate of crime, while others believe that there are other better ways. Discuss both ideas and give your opinion.

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Many people these days have differing ideas as regards diminishing the rate of
crime
. One side believes that
death
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penalty
 is the only way to reduce
crime
 rates,
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whereas
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 the others support the idea that there are other better ways.
However
, from my point of view, I think there are more humane and effective alternatives to address
crime
. On one hand, proponents of
death
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penalty
 argue that it serves as a
powerfull
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powerful
deterrant
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deterrent
 to serious crimes
as
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such as
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 murder. The
fair
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fear
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 of losing one's life can lead
potensial
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potential
 offenders to think twice before committing any
offense
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. In some countries, where the
death
penalty
 is still practiced, advocates claim that
crime
 rates have decreased
due to
 its presence.
On the other hand
, many argue that there are more effective solutions to prevent people from engaging in criminal activities.
Firstly
,
focusing
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 on identifying the root causes of criminal
behavior
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behaviour
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, we can prevent criminal actions by addressing underlying issues
such
 as poverty, lack of education, and psychological problems. I believe that educational and vocational training,
rehabilitation
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and rehabilitation
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 programs can reduce reoffending and help individuals reintegrate into society.
Furthermore
, there are concerns about the fairness and reliability of the
death
penalty
. Innocent people have been wrongfully convicted and executed in some cases. In my opinion, these cases can raise ethical and legal concerns about the irreversible nature of
this
 punishment. I have come to the
conslusion
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conclusion
 that
while
 the
death
penalty
 may serve as a deterrent in certain cases, the potential for wrongful convictions and its ethical implications
outweighs
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outweigh
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 its effectiveness. I believe that efforts should focus on preventive measures
such
 as education, improved social welfare programs, and better law enforcement to reduce
crime
 rates.
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Ensure each paragraph develops a single main idea with clear examples.
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Aim to elaborate more on certain points to provide depth.
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Refine grammatical accuracy and use precise vocabulary to articulate ideas clearly.
task achievement
The essay effectively presents both sides of the argument related to the death penalty.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion reaffirms the writer's opinion clearly.

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