The chart below shows the total sales value by product category in one particular store, in a three-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total sales value by product category in one particular store, in a three-year period. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
We have a chart that shows the annual sales value by
product
category in one store. It is
devided
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divided
in
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into
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three years, 2010, 2011, 2012. The
product
categories are
:
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soaps
,
and
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handwash
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handwashes
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, shampoos,
showergels
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shower gels
, and hair conditioners. In 2010 the
soaps
and
handwash
sales were bigger than the other products in the same
year
,
however
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it was the
year
with
less
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fewer
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seales
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sales
for
the
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soaps
and
handwash
. The total of money produced was about $150,000. In 2011, they produced $180,000 and in 2012
aproximatelly
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approximately
$190,000. The
year
of
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the shampoos sold the most was in 2011 sealing $90,000.
Secondly
, the most
succesfull
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successful
year
for the shower gels was 2012 with $120,000 and for the hair conditioners was
also
2012 with
aproximatelly
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approximately
$80,000. We can see that the
product
that sold the most was the
soaps
and
handwash
being the
product
that sold the most in the three-
year
period. The second
product
tath
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that
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sold the most was the shower gels and the shampoos and hair conditioners are a little bit similar
with
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in
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sales.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words product, soaps, handwash, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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