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You and a friend have both been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris, France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: •Congratulate him/her for also being accepted •Ask him/her if he/she would like to be your roommate •Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together

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Dear Juraij, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to extend my heartiest congratulations!!! on your admission
in
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Health
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 and Social System Navigation program at one of the most reputable
university
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of
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 Paris,
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Connel University. I am really excited to start my
eductional
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educational
 journey with you. I know we always had
dream
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 of graduating
togather
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together
 since childhood. It
high
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 time now to turn those dreams into reality.
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, I would like to say we have been best friends since first grade and we are very fond of each other.
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, I would still like to ask you if we can share an apartment
togather
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together
? I did not mean to offend you
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this
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 but I am just asking if you have any other plans regarding
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accommodation
 since your sister lives in
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 city. If so, please do not hesitate to reach out to me.
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, I have made an itinerary regarding all the fun
activites
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activities
 we can do a week prior
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 our scheduled classes.
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, with the visit to our
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favourite place Effiel Tower. Followed by a visit to the famous museum and
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Shakespeare
 theatre. I have
also
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whishlisted
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whitelisted
 some
dine - in
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dine-in
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 - options if you want to explore those with me. Let me know what
do
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you think about these activities. I hope
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 from you soon. Regards, Faiza

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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider organizing your letter into clearer paragraphs by separating different points or ideas to enhance readability.
Task Achievement
While the letter includes a congratulation, a question about being roommates, and a discussion of activities, consider detailing these points more thoroughly for a complete response.
Task Achievement
You maintained a warm and friendly tone, which is very suitable for a letter to a friend.
Coherence and Cohesion
The opening and closing of the letter are clear and appropriately structured for personal correspondence.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • congratulations
  • ecstatic
  • roommate
  • accommodation
  • expenses
  • cultural activities
  • museums
  • landmarks
  • French cuisine
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