Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?
In today's world,
face
Verb problem
apply
animals
extinct how to help animals
and save rare species.
The main problems Change the punctuation
?
this
causes are hunting and less conservation, and Change the determiner
these
most
valuable solutions are financial fines and Correct article usage
the most
creat
habitat. Maintaining to reduce Correct your spelling
create
animals
Change noun form
animals'
animal's
extinction
and help them survive in peace. Haunting is the most common cause to
animal Change preposition
of
extinction
, what
hunting Correct pronoun usage
apply
benefit
to kill Correct subject-verb agreement
benefits
animals
money they sell rare species with high prices, therefore
killing animals
and lead
to Wrong verb form
leading
extinction
that
is Correct pronoun usage
which
Correct article usage
a lose
lose
for Replace the word
loss
environment
and our world. Add an article
the environment
Moreover
, conservation for wildlife animals
human doesn't develop their natural life, they should improve their environment and protect them. For instance
, In some areas
people create conservation for Add a comma
areas,
animals
but they don't provide them with protection and less interest, however
, that can lead hunters to hunt animals
no one will tell them no. To tackle this
problem government must create financial fines to stop hunters from killing animals
and selling them, put
Correct word choice
and put
border
to stop Add an article
a border
black
market. Correct article usage
the black
However
, creating habitat
with high levels Correct article usage
a habitat
with
safety and Change preposition
of
environmental
, Replace the word
environment
that
can help Correct pronoun usage
apply
animals
to thrive and various species animals
Change preposition
of animals
can
survive. If we provide Verb problem
apply
animals
we'll reduce Correct article usage
the numbers
numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
extinction
. For example
, in Saudi Arabia the government creat
rules to protect Correct your spelling
creates
animals
from extinction
, which if hunt the animal you will have financial fines and anyone
Correct word choice
if anyone
harm
Change the verb form
harms
animals
they may go to jail. In conclusion, nations should create laws that protect animals
rights and habitats that feel safe. Change noun form
animals'
animal's
However
,all we should feel about animals
life because
they are important to our lives.Correct word choice
that
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structure cohesion
Work on developing a clearer structure for your essay. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea related to the question and build logically towards the conclusion.
supporting points
Support each main point with specific examples or evidence to strengthen the argument. Try to explain each example in detail for better clarity.
task response
Ensure that the essay answers all parts of the question comprehensively. It seems like the solutions proposed could be expanded with further analysis or examples.
task response
The essay provides a genuine concern for the issue of animal extinction and attempts to suggest solutions.
introduction conclusion
The introduction and conclusion both address the overall theme of protecting animals from extinction.
relevant examples
There is an effort to introduce specific solutions, such as financial fines and habitat creation, which adds relevance to the discussion.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion