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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will easier if there are fewer languages in the worlds. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#year #languages #people #life #worlds
There are a lot of possibilities that are beginning to open up
that
is
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 coming with learning
languages
. A majority of
people
 know only
few
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languages
,
that is
 in most cases it is the native
language
, and sometimes it could be the second one.
Language
 exists as an integral part of cultural identity. Learning
language
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 brings about knowledge about
culture
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the culture
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 and history associated with that
language
.
Firstly
, there are a lot of different
languages
 in the world that contain many words, which other
languages
 do not contain, most of the countries have their own native
language
, which is widespread in a country.
In contrast
, it is extremely sad to lose a
language
 to be born with.
Also
, in
this
 present-day
society
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people
 just run away from their cultural roots and traditions
however
, it depends and vary person to person because it is their right to choose the
language
 in which they want to speak.
In addition
, some
people
 are just stuck at some point in their professional life because they just want to stick with their own
language
 and do not want to learn any other lingo
therefore
, it is
also
 important to welcome other
languages
 as well. In conclusion, in my opinion,
people
 can more concentrate on their personal life,
career
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 and development if they
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have fewer choices as it will be compulsory for everyone to learn those particular
languages
however
, it is
also
 imperative to stick with cultural roots.
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Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mentioning particular languages that have become extinct or personal experiences with language learning could strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and flows logically into the next. Consider using linking words and phrases to improve the overall flow.
Task Achievement
Clarify your stance more clearly in the introduction and conclusion to enhance the task response.
Task Achievement
The essay addresses both sides of the argument, discussing the cultural impact of losing languages and the potential benefits of having fewer languages.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and the conclusion are present and they clearly encapsulate the main perspectives on the issue.
Task Achievement
There is a good attempt to connect language with cultural identity, which provides depth to the discussion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Cultural identity
  • Cognitive diversity
  • Language preservation
  • Uniformity
  • Economic benefits
  • Multiculturalism
  • Endangered languages
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Traditional knowledge
  • Ethnic group
  • Language death
  • Linguistic assimilation
  • Communication barriers
  • Language revitalization
  • Cultural integrity
  • Intergenerational transmission
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