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Band 4

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will easier if there are fewer languages in the worlds. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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There are a lot of possibilities that are beginning to open up
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 coming with learning
languages
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. A majority of
people
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 know only
few
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languages
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,
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 in most cases it is the native
language
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, and sometimes it could be the second one.
Language
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 exists as an integral part of cultural identity. Learning
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language
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 brings about knowledge about
culture
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the culture
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 and history associated with that
language
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.
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, there are a lot of different
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 in the world that contain many words, which other
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 do not contain, most of the countries have their own native
language
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, which is widespread in a country.
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, it is extremely sad to lose a
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 to be born with.
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, in
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 present-day
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people
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 just run away from their cultural roots and traditions
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, it depends and vary person to person because it is their right to choose the
language
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 in which they want to speak.
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, some
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 are just stuck at some point in their professional life because they just want to stick with their own
language
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 and do not want to learn any other lingo
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, it is
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 important to welcome other
languages
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 as well. In conclusion, in my opinion,
people
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 can more concentrate on their personal life,
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 and development if they
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have fewer choices as it will be compulsory for everyone to learn those particular
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however
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, it is
also
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 imperative to stick with cultural roots.

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Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mentioning particular languages that have become extinct or personal experiences with language learning could strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and flows logically into the next. Consider using linking words and phrases to improve the overall flow.
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Clarify your stance more clearly in the introduction and conclusion to enhance the task response.
Task Achievement
The essay addresses both sides of the argument, discussing the cultural impact of losing languages and the potential benefits of having fewer languages.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and the conclusion are present and they clearly encapsulate the main perspectives on the issue.
Task Achievement
There is a good attempt to connect language with cultural identity, which provides depth to the discussion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Cultural identity
  • Cognitive diversity
  • Language preservation
  • Uniformity
  • Economic benefits
  • Multiculturalism
  • Endangered languages
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Traditional knowledge
  • Ethnic group
  • Language death
  • Linguistic assimilation
  • Communication barriers
  • Language revitalization
  • Cultural integrity
  • Intergenerational transmission
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