People use the internet for medical advice and to do medical check ups rather than directly meeting with doctors in an office.
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internet
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doctors
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doctors'
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diagnosis. In my mind, both Add an article
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the clear
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internet
and real medical check-ups benefit Capitalize word
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apply
people
, but online medical assistance is not Use synonyms
substitute
for doctor visits.
The fact that some Correct article usage
a substitute
people
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doctors
assistance. The primary reason for Change noun form
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doctor's
this
could be that Linking Words
internet
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medias
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media's
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are mire
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more
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sides mainly
people
without comprehensive Use synonyms
health
insurance. Use synonyms
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internet
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allows
individuals to access medical information or virtual consultations from the comfort of their homes, Change the verb form
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people
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issues
or living in remote areas where visiting a doctor may be difficult . Change preposition
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that time, most inhabitants stayed at home and utilized telemedicine and online Change preposition
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health
resources.
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online surgical advice proves more efficient to use as Remove the comma
apply
wellas
cheapest than real medical insurance , Correct your spelling
well as
this
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it is the right way to go about checking one's medical Change the verb form
does not say
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condition
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and foremost , Correct your spelling
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hospital's
provide more knowledgeable and practical specialists , so every patient can go to the medical check-ups freely ,rather than using Change noun form
hospitals
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internet
at home. Add an article
the internet
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apply
doctors
can conduct physical examinations run tests and use medical tools that are unavailable online to make Use synonyms
precise
diagnosis
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a precise
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, experts who Linking Words
works
in hospitals or Change the verb form
work
health
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acre
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care
centre
can identify critical or Fix the agreement mistake
centres
life threating
conditions during visits, ensuring immediate action which may not be apparent through online consultations.
In conclusion, even though Add a hyphen
life-threating
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health -related
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health-related
internet
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medias
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media
more
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is more
effectively
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effective
affordably
for patients Correct your spelling
affordable
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managent
, Correct your spelling
management
however
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face-to-face
meeting
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meetings
doctors
offer accurate Use synonyms
diagnosis
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diagnoses
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Coherence and Cohesion
Work on organizing ideas more clearly to improve logical structure and flow. For example, ensure each paragraph conveys a single, clear point related to the thesis.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples and evidence to support main points.
Task Achievement
Avoid repetitive phrases, like 'internet medias' and focus on varied vocabulary.
Task Achievement
The essay presents a balanced view of the advantages and disadvantages of online medical consultations versus in-person doctor visits.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, each providing a broad summary of the key points discussed.
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