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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The table and pie charts provide an overview of the
number
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 of
research
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students
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 and their gender distribution in Australian universities from 2001 to 2010.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of
students
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 significantly increased between 2001 and 2010.
However
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, local
students
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 continued to account for the majority of the total
number
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 during
this
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 period.
According to
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 the table, in 2001, the
number
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 of domestic
research
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students
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 reached nearly 34,000, compared to approximately 5,200 international
research
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students
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.
Nevertheless
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, over the following nine years, the
number
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 of local
students
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 involved in
research
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 at Australian universities increased slightly, reaching about 40,000,
while
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 the international student population rose significantly to around 15,000. Regarding the pie chart, in 2001, the percentages of local male and female
students
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 were nearly identical, at 44% and 43%, respectively.
In contrast
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, non-local male
students
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 accounted for 9%,
while
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 non-local female
students
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 made up only 4%. In 2010, the total percentage of local
students
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 slightly decreased to 73%, with males constituting 38% and females 35%.
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, the proportions of non-local males and females rose marginally, reaching 12% and 15%, respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, research, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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