The graph and table below give information about the percentage of graduates in Australia who worked full time after university from 2004 and 2012.

The graph and table below give information about the percentage of graduates in Australia who worked full time after university from 2004 and 2012.
The line graph represents data about the percentage of
graduates
who worked in Australia between 2004 and 2012.
However
, the table compares the average salary of
graduates
in the same years.
Overall
, it can be seen that in line graph 2 trans fell over time.
In contrast
in the table, the highest index was listed by math
graduates
when other
graduates
had smaller average salaries. As the line graph shows, all
graduates
figures were unchanged in 2004 and 2008 respectively. In 2008, all
graduates
figure increased to approximately 85%.
Then
this
trend decreased to just 70%. Regarding mathematics
graduates
,
this
figure increased significantly to just 90% in 2006.
Then
this
index decreased to about 60% in 2012.
To begin
with, in 2004 and 2006 both categories held the same percentage at $41,000 and $43,500 respectively .In 2008, the salary of maths
graduates
became $51,800 ,
however
, the figure for other
graduates
was $48,000.
While
in 2010 math
graduates
were $48,500, but the salary of other
graduates
was $52,000.
In contrast
, in 2012
while
math
graduates
' salaries were $59,000, other
graduates
' salaries were just $53,000 .
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