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The line graph depicts the amount of electricity produced in France.

The line graph depicts the amount of electricity produced in France.
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The graph illustrates the amount of electricity produced in France from 1980 to 2012 using four different sources: thermal, nuclear, hydroelectric, and renewables. The data is measured in terawatt-hours (
TW-h
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).
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, nuclear power experienced the most significant increase, becoming the dominant source of electricity
production
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 by the end of the period. Thermal and hydroelectric
production
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 remained relatively stable,
while
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 renewables, though introduced later, showed a slight increase towards 2012. Nuclear energy
production
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 began at around 50
TW-h
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 in 1980 and witnessed a dramatic rise, reaching its peak at approximately 430
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 in the early 2000s before
leveling
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 off.
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, thermal energy fluctuated around 120
TW-h
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 throughout the entire period without any significant growth or decline. Hydroelectric power remained relatively constant, starting at around 50
TW-h
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 in 1980 and staying stable throughout the period. Renewables,
on the other hand
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, were negligible until the late 2000s, when they began to show a slight upward trend, reaching just under 50
TW-h
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 by 2012.
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 indicates a slow but growing contribution from renewable energy sources in France's electricity
production
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.
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