The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The plan illustrates a work facility area of Norbiton town and the forthcoming site design project.
Overall
,
that
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apply
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the eventual plan is
fully
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a fully
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reimagined townscape, containing
much
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many
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more buildings, including housing and the route over the river,
whereas
the factory is the only thing presented on the current map.
First,
industrial facilities will be fully demolished, so the living area could be built
instead
. It is seen, that the additional roundabout could be added as a road extension to the north, which leads to the farmland over the river through the county.
Furthermore
, a new medical
center
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centre
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and some shops are planned to
be build
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between two roundabouts at the
center
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centre
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.
Additionally
, it is a playground near the medical
center
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, which is surrounded by living blocks. An old road leads straight to a brand new school which is to the west of the
center
.
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