The graph and table below give information about the percentage of graduates in Australia who worked full-time after university from 2004 and 2012.
The graph shows the
percentage
of full-time workers in Australia with university degrees from 2004 to 2012, including mathematics graduates
. The table gives information about their average salaries
during the same period.
Overall
, the percentage
of mathematics graduates
working full-time decreased over the years, while
the percentage
of all graduates
stayed mostly stable. At the same time, maths graduates
earned higher salaries
than other graduates
after 2006.
In 2004, only 60% of mathematics graduates
were working full-time, which was much lower than 80% for all graduates
. By 2006, the percentage
of maths graduates
increased sharply to 85%, higher than the general group. However
, it steadily dropped to about 70% in 2012. The percentage
of all graduates
remained consistent at around 80%.
In terms of salaries
, both groups earned the same in 2004 and 2006 ($41,000 and $43,500). From 2008 onwards, maths graduates
earned more, with their salaries
rising to $59,000 by 2012, while
others earned $53,000.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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