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The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph and the chart give information about the amount of money that overseas tourists spent in the UK in a 30-year
period
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, that goes from 1980 to 2010,
as well as
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 why they decided to travel to the UK in the first and
last
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 year of the
period
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.
Overall
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, the amount of money spent increased during the given
period
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.
Furthermore
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, the holiday was the main reason in both 1980 and 2010.
In contrast
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, other reasons are those which
people
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 choose less often as the cause of visit in the same years. Money spent by overseas visitors fluctuated over the given
period
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. In 1980 the total expenditure was nearly £8 billion,
then
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 after an initial decrease, it reached its peak between 1995 and 2000 with £12 billion.
Finally
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, in 2010 it was over £10.5 billion. The percentage of
people
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 who choose holiday as the reason for visit decreased between 1980 and 2010,
although
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 it remained around 40%. A similar negative trend was seen
by
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for
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 other reasons which decreased to under 10% in 2010.
On the other hand
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, business and visiting
people
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 saw a positive trend.
In particular
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, visiting
people
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 soar from 18.7% to 28.2%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • steady increase
  • fluctuations
  • overseas visitors
  • significant rise
  • primary reasons
  • pie charts
  • holiday visits
  • business trips
  • visits to friends and relatives
  • expenditure
  • travel options
  • economic factors
  • tourism marketing strategies
  • global travel priorities
  • proportions
  • changing
  • correlate
  • reflect
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