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The table below shows the change in the number of people (million) taking part in five different physical activities between 2001 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below shows the change in the number of people (million) taking part in five different physical activities between 2001 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The table below shows how the
popularities
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popularity
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 of 5 sports in Australia changed between 2001 and 2009.
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, it is evident that there were mixed results about changes in 5 different sports in Australia, but the total amount of 5 activities increased by the end, in accordance with the 2001 figure. It is obvious that walking was still the most popular activity in 5 activities, increasing from 4.5
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 people in 2001 to 6.8
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 people in 2009, by 51%.
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, between 2001 and 2009, running followed a similar pattern to the
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popularity
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 of walking, by 89%,
rasing
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rising
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 from 0.9 to 1.7.
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, the number of people playing tennis was still the least, decreasing by 23% from 0.9
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players
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 in 2001 to 0.7
million
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players
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 in 2009, which was equal to the number of
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 in 2005.
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, the number of
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 loving swimming revealed the opposite trend to that of tennis, with a 10% ascent, from 2.1
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 in 2001 to 2.3
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 in 2009.
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, the popularity of aerobics experienced
most
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the most
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 dramatic ascent, rising by 155% from 1.1
mp
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 in 2001 to 2.8
mp
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 in 2009.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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