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The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustration gives information about how the
price
 of
food
 and
oil
 had variations around the globe for an eleven-year period starting
at
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in
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 2000.
Untill
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Until
 2005, both commodities had fluctuations, and they intersected each other
in
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at
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 several points without significant changes; during a
half
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half-decade
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decade
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decade,
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 their
price
 increased from nearly 90
dollars
 to just over 110
dollars
.
However
, in early 2005, exceeding the
price
 of
food
,
oil
price
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prices
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rised
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rose
with
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at
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 a higher pace;
while
 the prices of both were upward,
oil
 was approximately 30
dollars
 more expensive than
food
at the end
 of 2006.
Thereafter
, the trends met in the first months of 2007,
soard
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soared
 for 1.5 years and reached their peaks at almost 220
dollars
.
notebly
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notably
,
food
price
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prices
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 doubled.
Whereas
food
 and
oil
 plummeted until the beginning of 2009,
oil
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the oil
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price
 decrease was more
significantly
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significant
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 than
food
one
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apply
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.
Oil
price
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prices
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reduced
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were reduced
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 to under 120
dollars
 and
food
price
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prices
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 fell to 140
dollars
.
Then
, the
food
 and
oil
 trends
turbulated
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tubulated
 for one year , and
skyracketed
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skyrocketed
 in the
last
 year, ending at 140
nad
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and
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 100
dollars
 . The interesting thing after 2009 is that the
oil
price
 imitated the
food
 trend, but it could not outperform it. In conclusion, both curves had remarkable
corrolations
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correlations
correlation
;
eventhough
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even though
, in some years, one exceeded the other.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, food, oil, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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