Some people think that it is more effective for student to study in groups, while other believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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WHETHER STUDYING IN A
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OR STUDYING ALONE IS BETTER
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HAS LONG BEEN HOTLY DEBATED.
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ESSAY WILL DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS, IN A SUPPORT OF
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SOME, WHO SAY THAT STUDYING ALONE IS BETTER, THEY CLAIM THAT IT
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HELPS TO BE MORE DISCIPLINED. STUDYING ALONE GIVES A LOT OF RESPONSIBILITIES TO
STUDENTS
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SINCE THEY HAVE TO PREPARE THEIR LESSONS TIMELY AND THEY ARE LIKELY TO BE MORE ORGANIZED.
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STUDENT
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STUDENTS
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HAS THEIR OWN STRATEGIES AND TECHNIQUES WHICH BOOST ACADEMIC PERFORMANCE.
DUE TO
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, STUDYING ALONE IS MORE OPTIONAL.
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STUDENTS
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WHO HAVE THE PROBLEM OF DISTRACTION TEND TO ACQUIRE BETTER ACADEMIC RESULTS THROUGH STUDYING ALONE. ON THE OPPOSITE SIDE,
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I SUPPORT ADVOCATES OF STUDYING IN A
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BELIEVE THAT IT IS
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EFFECTIVE THAN STUDYING ALONE FOR SEVERAL REASONS. THE FIRST REASON WHY THEY BELIEVE THAT
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STUDYING IS BETTER IS MOTIVATION. TO ELABORATE
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WHEN
STUDENTS
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ENGAGED
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IN
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LEARNING, PEERS MOTIVATE
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EACH
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AND IT HELPS TO FOSTER ACADEMIC CAPABILITIES.
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A COMPETITIVE
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SPIRITS
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STUDYING,
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IS THE MAIN FACTOR WHICH FORCES
STUDENTS
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STUDYING
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IN ADDITION
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STUDY CAN IMPROVE COMMUNICATION AND CORPORATION SKILLS, WHICH LEAD TO SOCIALIZING AND INTERACTING,
STUDENTS
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ABLE TO EXCHANGE
THIER
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THEIR
IDEAS AND
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LEARN TO RESPECT
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THEM
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,THE MAIN THINGS WHICH ARE LEARNT FROM
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STUDYUNG ARE MANAGEMENT OF TIME AND BEING PUNCTUAL.
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STUDENTS
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TURN
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SOCIAL THROUGH
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ENGAGING IN
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STUDYING.
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, BOTH SIDES MIGHT BE TRUE
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CERTAIN
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DEGREE,
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HOWEVER
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HOWEVER,
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I BELIEVE THAT STUDYING IN A
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IS MORE
EFFECTIVELY
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RATHER THAN STUDYING ALONE.
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Add more specific examples or evidence to support your points.
coherence cohesion
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task achievement
The essay addresses both views and provides a clear opinion, fulfilling the task requirement.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the discussion.
coherence cohesion
The essay logically structures the argument in support of group study.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diverse perspectives
  • comprehension
  • retention
  • collaboration
  • communication skills
  • peers
  • accountable
  • individual learning styles
  • self-discipline
  • autonomy
  • isolation
  • gaps in understanding
  • peer input
  • discussion
  • clarify doubts
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