The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (COz) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (COz) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
graph
illustrates the
carbon
dioxide
emissions in metric
tonnes
per
person
in five different cities between 1967 and 2007.
overall
, people in Italy and Portugal showed
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an increased
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increased
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in the emissions
carbon
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of carbon
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dioxide
from 1967 till 2007.
while
public
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the public
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in
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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and Sweden showed
decreased
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a decreased
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pattern
of
carbon
dioxide
emission
. In Portugal, the
graph
gradual increase in CO2 emissions, from 1967, which was around three metric
tonnes
to 1997 which was almost five metric
tonnes
.
Then
the
graph
remained steady til 2007 with the same metric
tonnes
.
carbon
dioxide
emission
per
person
in
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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was highest in 1967, starting from almost eleven
tonnes
and showed
decreasing
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a decreasing
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pattern
and ended with nine metric
tonnes
per
person
in the year 2007.
however
, still remained
on
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at
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the top in 2007 among other countries. The
pattern
of
carbon
dioxide
emission
per
person
in Sweden
,
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started from Nine metric
tonnes
per
person
in 1967 and showed
rapid
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a rapid
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surge in
emission
rates in the year 1977,
whith
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with
which
average
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an average
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rate of eleven
tonnes
.
Then
the
graph
showed
rapid
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a rapid
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decline till 1987 with seven
tonnes
of
carbon
dioxide
emission
per
person
and afterwards stayedingradual decreasing
pattern
till 2007 and ended
around
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with around
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five metric
tonnes
of
carbon
dioxide
emission
. Italy showed
rapid
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a rapid
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surge from 1967 to 1977 and
remaid
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remained
remain
steady till 2007 with seven metric
tonnes
per
person
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, carbon, dioxide, tonnes, person, pattern, emission with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "surge" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions
  • per capita
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • industrialization
  • environmental policy
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • climate change
  • mitigation efforts
  • emission levels
  • comparison
  • decade
  • environmental impact
  • greenhouse gases
  • sustainable development
  • regulatory measures
  • technological advancements
  • energy consumption
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