Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the impacts on society and families?
These days, many people decide that they will have
children
later in their life rather than having a child
after marriage. In this
essay, I will argue about why young people do
not interested Verb problem
are
to have
a baby at their early stage and bad impacts Change preposition
in having
on
society Change preposition
apply
as well as
family members.
Nowadays, after marriage
young couple thinks that, if they have a baby recently Add a comma
marriage,
then
they might face financial
crisis in future. So, they decide not to have any Correct article usage
a financial
children
too early. For example
, a graduated student who just got his first job recently and got married at the same time. Thereafter
, he started saving for his future child
, he and his wife thinks
that, after saving a good amount of money they can have a kid. Change the verb form
think
Therefore
, they think it wasn't a perfect time to have a baby at that early stage of their life and they also
consider it as a failure due to
not provide
enough quality education to their Wrong verb form
providing
children
if a children
born early at that moment.
On the other hand
, newlyweds
mentality could bring imbalance in the society or a family, because when a parents get so older than his Correct article usage
a newlyweds
child
, that
the Correct word choice
apply
children
might not get a decent education by the family and Fix the agreement mistake
child
as a result
parents might lose control over their children
. For instance
, Andrew was a government employee he married early at the age
of 22 and didn't wish to have a
Correct the article-noun agreement
children
a child
children
at that point. After
20 years later he decided to have one, at Change preposition
apply
firstly
he was so happy about his newborn Change the word
first
child
but after another
20 years later his Correct quantifier usage
apply
son
Change noun form
son's
age
touched adolescence and his son chosen
a bad path for his life and became a drug addict. At that time Andrew was 62 years old and he couldn't teach him a lesson for it Wrong verb form
chose
due to
his age
restrictions.
In conclusion, the
Change preposition
in the
age
of modern technology, people lost their tradition
and became so unclear about their future. Fix the agreement mistake
traditions
Newlywed
cannot decide whether they should have Replace the word
Newlyweds
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
children
a child
children
or not and consequently
they lost
their control over Wrong verb form
lose
children
, Correct pronoun usage
their children
as a
result
Add a comma
result,
child's
do not listen to their parents and become heartless at some point.Change noun form
children
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