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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came f the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main featu make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came f the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main featu make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart and table depict the budget for the police in a specific place in the United Kingdom for 2017–2018.
Overall
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, the budget increased during
this
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period
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, and the most significant contribution was from the national government. Most of
this
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 money was spent on officers’ salaries. The police income from the national government was the highest amount among all contributors,
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 it rose from 175.5
million
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 to 177.8
million
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 by the end of the
period
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. Local taxes showed a significant increase of about 10
million
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 in that year. In 2017, it was 91.2
million
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,
then
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 in 2018, it ended at 102.3
million
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.
While
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 other sources did not exhibit any improvement, it rose slightly from 38
million
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 to 38.5
million
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.
On the other hand
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, the distribution of income was allocated between officers’ wages, technology, and buildings and transport. Officer's salaries occupied the highest percentage of spending,
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 it showed a small decrease , it was 75% in 2017, and it ended the
period
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 at 69%. Building and transport did not demonstrate any increment; it remained constant at 17%. The amount of spending on technology increased from 8% to 14% by the end of the
period
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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