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The line graph illustrates the percentage of audiences in UK who listen to radio and watch TV during the day from October to December 1992

The line graph illustrates the percentage of audiences in UK who listen to radio and watch TV during the day from October to December 1992
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The picture given above gives information about the proportions of UK residents who listened to the
radio
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 or watched
TV
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 during a day in two months, October and December, in 1992.
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 with, from the late hours of the
night
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 until 5 am, the audiences of both communication tools were the lowest compared to other day times; they oscillated around 5
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.
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, from 7 to 9 am, the trend of
radio
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 soared suddenly to 25% before it plummeted to 10% until the afternoon.
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 it negligibly increased for an hour by 5 pm, and it fell gradually and stopped at 5
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 at midnight
night
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. The proportion of those who preferred
TV
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, fluctuated by 11 am when it commenced its growing trend, it surpassed the
radio
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 curve at 15% at 13 pm. Plateauing for two hours at the same rate, it skyrocketed and touched its maximum, nearly 50%, in the early hours of
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night
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. following an immediate reduction, it plunged to 20
percent
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 after 23 pm.
Overall
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,
radio
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 and
TV
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 absorbed their audiences at different times during the day.
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,
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 more people tended to listen to the
radio
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 in the morning, people often watched
TV
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 at
night
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words radio, tv, night with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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