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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the process of generating electricity in a hydroelectric
power
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 station that has two stages which are during the day and during night time.
First,
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during the day,
water
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 is taken from the river as the dam, which is located at a high-level
reservoir
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, is being opened.
Then
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,
water
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 will immediately flow to the
power
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 station where the reversible turbines are operating the generator.
Next,
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the generator will change
power
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 lines into the national grid in order to generate electricity. During nighttime, a low-level
reservoir
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 will enter the reversible turbines, where it pumps
water
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 back up. It will instantly flow to the high-level
reservoir
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, and the cycle continues.
To sum up
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, in order to generate electricity, a hydroelectric
power
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 station needs to do several steps during the day and night. It requires opening and closing the dam
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 and pumping
water
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 from high to low-level
reservoir
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 and low to high-level by turbines.
Moreover
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, it requires a connector for the
power
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 lines to the national grid with the help of the generator.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, water, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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