The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?
It is often argued that people need more free
days
per week
by reducing
their working hours. Change preposition
to reduce
However
I completely disagree with Add a comma
However,
this
opinion, Because workers
have considerable
number of leaves per Change the article
a considerable
the considerable
year
and lots of works
need to be done to be a successful company.
Fix the agreement mistake
work
Firstly
, I believe that two days
is more than enough as weekend
for Add an article
a weekend
the weekend
workers
since,
most Remove the comma
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
companies
allow them to have sufficient numbers of leaves per year
Change preposition
in additional
additional
to Replace the word
addition
Add an article
the weekend
weekend
. Fix the agreement mistake
weekends
As well as
in Sri Lanka, there is at least one holyday
per Correct your spelling
holy day
each
month. Correct determiner usage
apply
Hence
, no need to short
the working Replace the word
shorten
week
. Nevertheless
, some companies
don’t allow weekend
as Fix the agreement mistake
weekends
leaves
for Correct subject-verb agreement
leave
workes
and Correct your spelling
workers
that is
not acceptable. Every workers
should have free Change to a singular noun
worker
days
after a working week
. For instance
, construction companines
don’t let Correct your spelling
companies
labours
Correct your spelling
labourers
to
have their Fix the infinitive
apply
weekend
as holydays
.
Correct your spelling
holidays
Secondly
, in order to become a successful and leading company, workers
should work hardly
without thinking about the rest Change the word
hard
days
. Organizations pay a good salary for workers
so they should do their jobs to achieve main
goals of the Correct article usage
the main
companies
. If the working days
per week
is
deducted, it is not easy to cover targets within the time frame. As an example, Change the verb form
are
IT
industry pays good money for their people with enough Correct article usage
the IT
leaver
per Correct your spelling
leave
year
then
companies
ahieve thier
Correct your spelling
achieve their
goal
and Fix the agreement mistake
goals
workes
are Correct your spelling
workers
also
happy no
need Change preposition
with no
of
shorten the working Change preposition
to
week
.
To conclude
, I strongly believe that its
not necessary to have Replace the word
it's
it is
longer
Add an article
a longer
weekend
by decreasing the working period of Fix the agreement mistake
weekends
workers
due to
the fact that they have already enough leaves per year
and many government holydays
. Correct your spelling
holidays
Besides
to be a developed country everyone should do their jobs seriously.Submitted by prabodyagamage on
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