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The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

#week #workers #weekend
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It is often argued that people need more free
days
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 per
week
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by reducing
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to reduce
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 their working hours.
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However
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However,
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 I completely disagree with
this
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 opinion, Because
workers
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 have
considerable
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a considerable
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 number of leaves per
year
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 and lots of
works
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work
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 need to be done to be a successful company.
Firstly
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, I believe that two
days
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 is more than enough as
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weekend
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a weekend
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 for
workers
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 since
,
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apply
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 most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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companies
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 allow them to have sufficient numbers of leaves per
year
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in additional
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additional
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addition
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 to
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the weekend
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weekend
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weekends
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.
As well as
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 in Sri Lanka, there is at least one
holyday
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holy day
 per
each
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apply
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month.
Hence
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, no need to
short
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shorten
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 the working
week
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.
Nevertheless
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, some
companies
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 don’t allow
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weekend
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weekends
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 as
leaves
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leave
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 for
workes
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workers
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 and
that is
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 not acceptable. Every
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workers
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worker
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 should have free
days
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 after a working
week
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.
For instance
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, construction
companines
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companies
 don’t let
labours
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labourers
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to
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apply
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have their
weekend
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 as
holydays
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holidays
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.
Secondly
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, in order to become a successful and leading company,
workers
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 should work
hardly
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hard
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 without thinking about the rest
days
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. Organizations pay a good salary for
workers
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 so they should do their jobs to achieve
main
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the main
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 goals of the
companies
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. If the working
days
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 per
week
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is
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are
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 deducted, it is not easy to cover targets within the time frame. As an example,
IT
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the IT
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 industry pays good money for their people with enough
leaver
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leave
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 per
year
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then
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companies
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ahieve thier
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achieve their
goal
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goals
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 and
workes
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workers
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 are
also
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 happy
no
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with no
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 need
of
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to
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 shorten the working
week
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.
To conclude
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, I strongly believe that
its
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it's
it is
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 not necessary to have
longer
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a longer
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weekend
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weekends
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 by decreasing the working period of
workers
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due to
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 the fact that they have already enough leaves per
year
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 and many government
holydays
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holidays
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.
Besides
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 to be a developed country everyone should do their jobs seriously.
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