The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that people need more free
days
per
week
by reducing
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their working hours.
However
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I completely disagree with
this
opinion, Because
workers
have
considerable
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a considerable
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number of leaves per
year
and lots of
works
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need to be done to be a successful company.
Firstly
, I believe that two
days
is more than enough as
weekend
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a weekend
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for
workers
since
,
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apply
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most
of
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the
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companies
allow them to have sufficient numbers of leaves per
year
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in additional
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additional
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to
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the weekend
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weekend
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weekends
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.
As well as
in Sri Lanka, there is at least one
holyday
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holy day
per
each
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apply
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month.
Hence
, no need to
short
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the working
week
.
Nevertheless
, some
companies
don’t allow
weekend
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weekends
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as
leaves
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leave
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for
workes
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workers
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and
that is
not acceptable. Every
workers
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worker
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should have free
days
after a working
week
.
For instance
, construction
companines
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companies
don’t let
labours
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labourers
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to
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have their
weekend
as
holydays
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holidays
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.
Secondly
, in order to become a successful and leading company,
workers
should work
hardly
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hard
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without thinking about the rest
days
. Organizations pay a good salary for
workers
so they should do their jobs to achieve
main
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goals of the
companies
. If the working
days
per
week
is
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deducted, it is not easy to cover targets within the time frame. As an example,
IT
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the IT
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industry pays good money for their people with enough
leaver
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leave
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per
year
then
companies
ahieve thier
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achieve their
goal
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goals
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and
workes
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workers
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are
also
happy
no
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with no
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need
of
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to
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shorten the working
week
.
To conclude
, I strongly believe that
its
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it is
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not necessary to have
longer
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a longer
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weekend
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weekends
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by decreasing the working period of
workers
due to
the fact that they have already enough leaves per
year
and many government
holydays
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holidays
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.
Besides
to be a developed country everyone should do their jobs seriously.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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