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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and in the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summerise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and in the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summerise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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the line chart illustrates the amount of
money
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 the USA and the UK spend on
fuel
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.
Overall
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, the poorest class in the USA used
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far higher incomes for
fuel
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 than any other class.
While
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 the poverty communities in the UK spent just a negligible
money
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 on petrol. The poorest British spend their budget on
fuel
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 just approximately 0,5% of their income, indicating they do not possess a private vehicle.
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, the poverty communities in the United States allocate the highest percentage, reaching the peak at over 5%,
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 proportion declines gradually when Americans earn more. Turning to the other features, the expenditure for petrol of middle-income residents in the United States is significantly higher than the average income in the United Kingdom by 3%.
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, the gap between the two countries tends to be narrower when moderate-income people make more
money
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.
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, the part of the wealthiest community in the two nations has the amount of percentage
fuel
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 expenditure closely.
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, the richest Americans used less their
money
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 on
fuel
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 than the wealthiest British

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, fuel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Petrol expenditure
  • Expenditure trends
  • Spending comparison
  • Fluctuations in expenditure
  • Car dependency
  • Public transportation
  • Seasonal variations
  • Global oil prices
  • Government policies
  • Environmental concerns
  • Fuel tax
  • Spending habits
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